Emma, Clarice and Connor have got an intial draft for our short drama, we've focussed on getting on a character that is in mid 30s but i think if problems occur with getting hold of actors of that age, we could make a few small changes and develop it for a younger character. Looking at it from an editing point of view it seems pretty simple, however i think it could still develop a little more
Screenplay
EXT.
A man of around 35 is sat on a bench in the street of
an
urban city. He has short brown hair, unshaven however not
untidy. He is
from a working class background.
GARY
(Laughing as though someone
has
asked him something)
Yeah, I’d defiantly say it’s got
way out of
hand.
(Laughs)
You’d have thought i would have
realised by
now.
(Pauses)
The one that has always been there
for me is Ben, don’t
no what I’d do
without him to be honest.
Even before everything
happened
we’d go for jogs together, you
gotta keep healthy, however then
on
way back stop of at the pub for a
sneaky pint, gotta balance it
out.
(Pauses)
CUTS TO BLACK
EXT.
Gary is walking along side the
camera, he comes across as a
happy go lucky type, however has something deep
that
troubles him.
GARY
You have to laugh at your own
mistakes, it’s
what gets you
through life, other wise you’d just
worry about the smallest
things.
(Pauses)
I remember this one time when i was
a kid, i was an
only child at
still, and my mother was a stay at
home mum, my dad worked
with the
police.
NEED IDEAS
All i heard was my mum shouting
from the
kitchen
(Puts on a feminine voice)
Gary what you doing now, i
swear
you’ll be the death of me one day,
always up to something, silly
boy.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 2.
GARY
We used to be quite close, went
on
holidays together, usually the
cheap one out of the
paper.
(Laughs)
My dad was always a tight git.
(Pauses)
However he
always wanted us to have
a good time and make the most of
the holidays we
went on.
Gary looks down, looks as though he is looking for
something
which is out of shot. He shows the camera a photo from a
past
holiday with his parents.
GARY
This is from before my brother was
born,
after he came along it all
changed.
(Pauses and seems to drift of
in
his own world after a while
a smile comes on his face and
he starts to
laugh, Audio
sounds of beach, such as
children and waves)
This was one
of the best holidays i
went on as a child, we was staying
in one of the
smallest caravans iv
ever seen, it must have been the
first full day we
was there, it was
proper pissin’ it down. I was sat
probably moaning, my
mum was laid
on the make shift bed trying to
ignore me as she had an
headache,
think that was my doing. My dad
had, had enough and packed us
all
into the car, we had only walked to
the car and we was
drenched.
(Pauses)
I have no idea why he thought it
would be a good
idea, but he drove
us to the beach, me and my mum
looked at each other, we
thought
he’d gone mad.......he had stripped
down to his boxes and was
of
running down the beach in the
pouring rain, mental!
The crazy fuck
went for a swim in
torrential rain, apparently it was
to cheer us up, i
just think he
went a bit mad stuck in a small
caravan with me and
mum.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 3.
Turns out the whether for the rest
of
the holiday was hot and sunny,
however my dad developed a cold
over night,
so for the rest of the
holiday we had him moaning about
having ’Man
Flu’.
EXT.
Gay is sat back in on the bench, looks more dishearten
than
before, more serious and looking at a dogeared picture.
GARY
This
is a picture of my kids, I
don’t get to see them much any
more, i guess
it’s for the best
really.
(Pauses)
My boy, I’d like to think, is
a
chip of the block.
(Smiles to himself)
He sees the good in
everything, and
a little accident prone just like
his old man.
I would
love for one day, to take
my kids on holiday, but for now
that won’t be
happening.
EXT.
Gary is walking down the same street as before. Looks
as
though he is pushing something, can’t see what it is.
GARY
It all
started when my brother was
born, my parents where more
bothered about
pleasing the baby.
(Says this in a sarcastic way
and rolls eyes)
I’d
started hanging round with an
older crowd, bad idea to be honest.
Looking
back now, at the time i
knew it was wrong, but i didn’t
like to admit it.
They would all go
to the dogs, or the footie and
would always place bets,
i felt
like I’d have to join in....It just
got out of control, every time
I’d
win it was the best feeling ever,
like a thrill, a kind of
high.
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 4.
(Pauses)
My parents didn’t notice i
was out
most of the time. I knew my dad was
disappointed in me, and i knew
he
was aware i had started gambling. I
just couldn’t help it, I kept
it
under control.
(pauses)
I’d met my beautiful wife, had to
kids
and was planning on having the
third.
(Pauses, blank expression on
his
face)
We lost the child. I couldn’t cope.
It just got out of hand, Tess
had
it hard not only did she have to go
through the miscarriage but
i
wasn’t there for her, I’d be out at
all hours, i lost all our
money
near enough. That’s when she’d had
enough. She kicked me out. That
was
the worst day of my life, i could
she the kids in the upstairs
window
while she thew my clothes out. She
had found all the mail I had
hid
saying I’d missed a payment. I was
stupid.....
(Goes quiet, into
his own
world)
EXT.
Gary is sat, leaning against a wall. He is sat on
the floor
but we are unaware of this.
GARY
So now im out on the
streets, my
mum and dad are to disappointed in
me to help me out, not that
I’d
take anything from them, its my own
fault.
He goes to take out a
watch out of his pocket, however with
it he pull some scratch cards out with
it.
GARY
Oops, you weren’t meant to see
that. Every now and then
people
will leave me money, and I just
want to try and get back on
my
feet....I just have a feeling that
this time it will happen. I
did
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)
CONTINUED: 5.
GARY (cont’d)
once win the
pound back (laughs), i
guess that doesn’t count though.
It’s not all bad
though, Ben is
still around keeping me company,hes
always around and has
been through
everything.
When i got thrown out, he was there
to pick up
the pieces. Bless him im
sure he gets fed up with me
sometimes.
It gets
pretty lonely on the
streets, everyone needs someone
there for them no
matter who it is.
TWO-SHOT: GARY AND HIS DOG, BEN.
Don’t we ben lad!
He
feeds the dog a biscuit and ruffles his head. He gets up
and walks off with
the dog lead in one hand and pushing a
trolley.
FADES OUT:
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